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I watch you, tumbling
In your red spiral death-dive;
The dance of Autumn.
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A pattern showed up pretty quickly reading this shortlist: these poems don’t circle what they’re about. They just say it. That makes for some tough, raw reads. Miscarriage, infidelity, chronic pain, money, addiction, fear for someone you love. Not much is softened or dressed up. By the end, I felt like I needed a cigarette, and I don’t even smoke.
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I read the one about striptease first, and now we are on classic ballroom dancing. Love it, Rachel!
The contrast between dance and death-dive is excellent Rachel, and hits on both ways of seeing the leaves fall😊
Spiral death dive! What a turn of phrase and image, Rachel! 😃
The dance of death reminds me of Bergman’s film The Seventh Seal and the medieval plague years in general. For me it makes the poem feel like more than a celebration of autumn, perhaps a commentary about the autumnal season of our lives. But I’m probably reading into it. Beautiful poem, Rachel. Good luck on the challenge!
Another vivid Autumn haiku: Excellent: “ red spiral death-dive;”🤩
Autumn dance and deathfall. God, you're such a creative writer. I already knew that, of course, Rachel, but it's always so good getting that reminder. You really should put a book together. One of your minis/micros and one of your poems. Well done.
Oooo, death-dive. I love that! Such a beautiful Haiku!