A single splinter of brilliant light
Darts through the empty keyhole,
Shining with hope that the flood will come
To ease the drought in my soul.
The key to my fate lies within, I know,
But I've lost it, somehow, in the status quo.
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My first entry for Poppy's Prompts for October. A bit on the dark side, I know, but this set of prompts lends itself pretty well to that:
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Dana Crandell
Dad, Stepdad, Grandpa, Husband, lover of Nature and dogs.
Poet, Writer, Editor, Photographer, Artist
My poetry collection: Life, Love & Ludicrosity
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A pattern showed up pretty quickly reading this shortlist: these poems don’t circle what they’re about. They just say it. That makes for some tough, raw reads. Miscarriage, infidelity, chronic pain, money, addiction, fear for someone you love. Not much is softened or dressed up. By the end, I felt like I needed a cigarette, and I don’t even smoke.
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I adore that ending!
Nice!!💗💕
This is brilliantly done! I especially like: “A single splinter of brilliant light Darts through the empty keyhole”🤩
brilliant
The last line was really thought provoking. Excellent piece and use of the prompt words!
Wow, I love this so much, Dana! "Shining with hope that the flood will come To ease the drought in my soul." - just masterful. ❤️
Ah that was so poignantly beautiful! Loved your poem!
Clever use of the prompts Dana, I love the melancholic mood! Brilliantly done!
An effective blend of the words in the prompt, and lovely poem!
This is really really good. Poignant. 😍 The flood metaphor was completely unexpected. And i adore how “key” came in to complete the set up of “keyhole.”
This is absolutely beautiful. Well done, my friend.
Gorgeous work, sir! Such striking, vivid, living language. Absolutely loved it :)
Outstanding work, Dana, and not too dark.
A bit dark yes, but hauntingly beautiful
ooooooh verrrrry good, sir!